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2019-09-23 · 첨삭 강사 Jedah

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[What is the most positive change you have experienced in your life? Nowadays, I write a daily report every night. I saw it on Youtube. Many people are busy, but most of them don\'t know how our day is going. The daily report is writing everything for the whole day. And I evaluate the quality of the work what I did and I make comment or review about it. In addition, before starting the day, I write the To-do list. In the night before going to bed, I write about the thankful points and reflect things. Finally, I write a diary and sometimes new ideas. I started this work from three weeks before. Interestingly, I am wasting time on SNS and Youtube than I expected. Even I still spend time on SNS and Youtube, but the time is decreased. Above all, I know my time flow how my day passes and what I did on the day. It makes me feel self-confidence and make a new goal for my life. I will keep this work and I want to change myself for better.

강사 첨삭

Hi [이름]! Nice homework! Thank you for sharing! ^ ^ You know what, I have been meaning to do this for the past months now, but, seemingly I just couldn\'t start it. But what your are doing is actually great! I read so many articles on writing about your day and writing about the things you are thankful for. It actually gives you a more positive outlook in life! ^ ^
-Teacher Jedah

Nowadays, I write a daily report every night.
>>CORRECT
I saw it on YouTube.
>>CORRECT
Many people are busy, but most of them don\'t know how our day is going.
>>Many people are busy, and most of them don\'t even know how their days go.
The daily report is writing everything for the whole day.
>>The daily report is about writing everything that happened to you in a day.
And I evaluate the quality of the work what I did and I make comment or review about it.
>>And I evaluate the quality of my work, what I did and I make a comment or a review about it.
In addition, before starting the day, I write the To-do list.
>>CORRECT
In the night before going to bed, I write about the thankful points and reflect things.
>>At night, before going to bed, I write the things I\'m thankful about and reflect on things.
Finally, I write a diary and sometimes new ideas.
>>CORRECT
I started this work from three weeks before.
>>I started this habit three weeks ago.
Interestingly, I am wasting time on SNS and Youtube than I expected.
>>Interestingly, I figured out that I spend and waste most of my time on SNS and YouTube.
Even I still spend time on SNS and Youtube, but the time is decreased.
>>But these days, even if I spend time on SNS and YouTube, the time spent has decreased.
Above all, I know my time flow how my day passes and what I did on the day.
>>Above all, I know how my time and day went.
It makes me feel self-confidence and make a new goal for my life.
>>It makes me feel self-confident and it gives me a new goal for my life.
I will keep this work and I want to change myself for better.
>>I will keep this work and I want to change/improve myself better.

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