11/3 homework
학생이 쓴 원문
I try to elaborate instructions to my patients.
All patients come to my clinic because they have something wrong.
Also, they want to know what is the cause of their problems and how to treat the problem.
They have a right for their diseases in detail, so I explain them clearly and kindly as possible.
I often go to the clinic and I feel satified with some doctor\'s detailed explanations.
As these experiences, I give my patients good instructions.
Especially, lifestyle modification is important in case of voice problem and reflux disease.
I strongly recommend that they should quit smoking, drink lots of water, and not eat much like that.
강사 첨삭
Good afternoon, Dr. [이름]!
Elaborating details to patients and to people generally is very impotant because we cannot assume that they already know something. A wise person knows this by heart. Even we, adults even do not understand some nuisance ar times. So a thorough and careful elaboration is necessary. After all, the human brain has not evolved to absorb information and store is forever in our brains.
Anyway, I have underlines my grammar suggestions below. Kindly go over them carefully. They include exclusion of some words and better word suggestions or word order. Thank you so much for your patience and hardwork in elaborating your homework answer!
I will catch you again next week!
-T. Donna~
>> Correct!
All patients come to my clinic because they have something wrong.
>> Correct!
Also, they want to know what is the cause of their problems and how to treat the problem.
>> Correct!
Or: Also, they want to know what is the cause of their problem and how to treat it.
They have a right for their diseases in detail, so I explain them clearly and kindly as possible.
>> They have the right to know about their diseases in detail, so I explain it to them clearly and kindly as possible.
I often go to the clinic and I feel satified with some doctor\'s detailed explanations.
I often go to the clinic and I feel satified with some doctor\'s detailed explanations.
>> Correct!
As these experiences, I give my patients good instructions.
As these experiences, I give my patients good instructions.
>> For these reasons, I give my patiens good instructions.
Especially, lifestyle modification is important in case of voice problem and reflux disease.
Especially, lifestyle modification is important in case of voice problem and reflux disease.
>> Correct!
Or: Lifestyle modification is important especially in case of voice problem and reflux disease.
I strongly recommend that they should quit smoking, drink lots of water, and not eat much like that.
>> I strongly recommend that they should quit smoking, drink lots of water, and not eat much.
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