11/4 homework
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If I can have a conversation with them, I want to say about the story for poor people in the world.
There are many kinds of people in the world.
We can divide rich, common, poor people.
But the boundary is very unclear.
And unfortunately, the portion of rich people is very small and that of common people is large.
More, unfortunately, poor people are concentrated in some countries or regions.
I know we become familiar in our small society and world where we live.
Most of the rich men maybe think they are not extremely rich and they need more money.
Some people say the sharing the money is not necessary for the democratic states.
I agree with it.
But, if rich people show mercy to poor people or countries, the world will become more worthy.
And they should be held with respect to people.
Practically, many top rich men like Bill Gates donate their money and contribute to the life of poor people, and they were respected by people.
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It could have been really ideal if the rich people wouldn\'t be so greedy to have more but instead would be generous enough to share their wealth to the poor and needy. But then again, you know what they say; \"you can give away all your money but it will not solve the problem of poverty\". It\'s a very sad truth. ~
-Teacher Jedah
>>If I can have a conversation with them, I want to share with them the conditions of the poor people in this world.
There are many kinds of people in the world.
There are many kinds of people in the world.
>>CORRECT
We can divide rich, common, poor people.
We can divide rich, common, poor people.
>>We can divide them among the rich, the common middle class and the poor people.
But the boundary is very unclear.
But the boundary is very unclear.
>>CORRECT
And unfortunately, the portion of rich people is very small and that of common people is large.
And unfortunately, the portion of rich people is very small and that of common people is large.
>>CORRECT
More, unfortunately, poor people are concentrated in some countries or regions.
More, unfortunately, poor people are concentrated in some countries or regions.
>>CORRECT
I know we become familiar in our small society and world where we live.
I know we become familiar in our small society and world where we live.
>>I know we have become familiar in our small society and the world where we live.
Most of the rich men maybe think they are not extremely rich and they need more money.
Most of the rich men maybe think they are not extremely rich and they need more money.
>>CORRECT
Some people say the sharing the money is not necessary for the democratic states.
Some people say the sharing the money is not necessary for the democratic states.
>>Some people say that sharing money/wealth is not necessary for the democratic states.
I agree with it.
I agree with it.
>>CORRECT
But, if rich people show mercy to poor people or countries, the world will become more worthy.
But, if rich people show mercy to poor people or countries, the world will become more worthy.
>>CORRECT
And they should be held with respect to people.
And they should be held with respect to people.
>>Hence, they can earn more respect from the people. (I hope this is what you mean.)
Practically, many top rich men like Bill Gates donate their money and contribute to the life of poor people, and they were respected by people.
Practically, many top rich men like Bill Gates donate their money and contribute to the life of poor people, and they were respected by people.
>>Practically, many top rich men like Bill Gates donate their money and contribute to the life of poor people, and they are respected by people.
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