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[What If You Were Given A Chance To Go To The Moon, Would You Go? Why Or Why Not?]
Absolutely I want to go to the Moon.
I was not interested in the universe because I thought it is irrelevant in my life.
I like the material things which I can see and touch.
So, even when I choose my major to enter the university, I selected the engineering field, not a natural science.
The universe was very vague to me.
But, the world is changing rapidly or human is becoming smart more.
Human wants to know where we came from or who we are and where we should go.
The universe technology is also developing very fastly.
I researched about the cosmic materials for two years in Japan.
I learned many things and my mind was also changed.
We can find the history and future in the universe.
Now many people know that the enemy or friends of humans are outside of earth.
When we accept that is is possible to realize the human very small being.
강사 첨삭
Hi [이름]! Thank you for accomplishing your homework and sending it early. I really appreciate it! ^ ^
Between July 1969 and December 1972, NASA put 12 men on the moon. Nobody has been back since, but plenty of people are still consumed with curiosity about how it feels to make the trip.
Given the chance, I would really love to travel, explore and learn more about it! ^ ^
-Teacher Jedah
Absolutely I want to go to the Moon.
>>CORRECT or
>>I absolutely want to go to the moon.
I was not interested in the universe because I thought it is irrelevant in my life.
I was not interested in the universe because I thought it is irrelevant in my life.
>>CORRECT
I like the material things which I can see and touch.
I like the material things which I can see and touch.
>>CORRECT
So, even when I choose my major to enter the university, I selected the engineering field, not a natural science.
So, even when I choose my major to enter the university, I selected the engineering field, not a natural science.
>>So, even when I chose my major in the university, I selected/chose an engineering field, not natural sciences.
The universe was very vague to me.
>>CORRECT
But, the world is changing rapidly or human is becoming smart more.
But, the world is changing rapidly or human is becoming smart more.
>>But, the world is changing rapidly and humans are becoming more smart.
Human wants to know where we came from or who we are and where we should go.
Human wants to know where we came from or who we are and where we should go.
>>Humans want to know where we came from or who we are and where we should go.
The universe technology is also developing very fastly.
The universe technology is also developing very fastly.
>>The technology for exploring the universe is also developing rapidly.
I researched about the cosmic materials for two years in Japan.
I researched about the cosmic materials for two years in Japan.
>>CORRECT
I learned many things and my mind was also changed.
I learned many things and my mind was also changed.
>>CORRECT or
>>I learned many things and my perception about the universe also changed.
We can find the history and future in the universe.
We can find the history and future in the universe.
>>CORRECT
Now many people know that the enemy or friends of humans are outside of earth.
Now many people know that the enemy or friends of humans are outside of earth.
>>CORRECT
When we accept that is is possible to realize the human very small being.
When we accept that is is possible to realize the human very small being.
>>When we accept this possibility, we would realize that humans are minuscule compared to what is there outside our world.
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