11/7 homework
학생이 쓴 원문
[If you could be an athlete, what sport would you like to be good at?]
I would like to be a swinmer.
My favorite sport is swim.
It is a very active sport and I like to put the strong energy foe very short time.
And I think my body is good at swimming because my lower body is stronger than upper body.
So I can kick well under the water.
But I know that famous athlete made effort how much.
I think the athlete is required both of physical and mental ability.
They train to get the high record and not to be tire their mind.
Only that kind of person get a medal.
In my field, researcher is required just mental ability.
We are focus on the theory and phenomenon and penetrate to them.
I think that an athlete is harder job than researcher.
Nontheless, if I can get a chance, I want to attend a swimming competition for amateur in some day.
And I think swimming is best excercise to me.
강사 첨삭
Hi [이름]! Wow! I thought you will be busy travelling but you still found time to do your homework. I admire your diligence and consistency. ^ ^
Very well thought of homework. I\'m pretty sure you will be a great swimmer! ^ ^ For me, strange as it may sound, but I\'ve always dreamed of becoming a boxer! I don\'t know why but I really think I can throw good punches. It\'s the opposite for me actually; I don\'t have strong arms so I want to develop it more, and I guess this kind of sport will help me with it! ^ ^
-Teacher Jedah
I would like to be a swimmer.
>>CORRECT
My favorite sport is swim.
My favorite sport is swim.
>>My favorite sport is swimming.
It is a very active sport and I like to put the strong energy foe very short time.
It is a very active sport and I like to put the strong energy foe very short time.
>>It is a very active sport and requires strength and endurance even for a short distance.
And I think my body is good at swimming because my lower body is stronger than upper body.
And I think my body is good at swimming because my lower body is stronger than upper body.
>>And I think I\'m good at swimming because my lower body is stronger than my upper body.
So I can kick well under the water.
So I can kick well under the water.
>>CORRECT
But I know that famous athlete made effort how much.
But I know that famous athlete made effort how much.
>>But I know it takes a lot of effort like most famous athlete do.
I think the athlete is required both of physical and mental ability.
I think the athlete is required both of physical and mental ability.
>>I think to become a real good athlete requires physical and mental abilities.
They train to get the high record and not to be tire their mind.
They train to get the high record and not to be tire their mind.
>>They train their bodies and mind to beat/make a good record.
Only that kind of person get a medal.
Only that kind of person get a medal.
>>Only that kind of person gets a medal.
In my field, researcher is required just mental ability.
In my field, researcher is required just mental ability.
>>In my field, being a researcher only requires good mental ability.
We are focus on the theory and phenomenon and penetrate to them.
We are focus on the theory and phenomenon and penetrate to them.
>>We are focused on the theory and phenomenon and delve deep into them.
I think that an athlete is harder job than researcher.
I think that an athlete is harder job than researcher.
>>I think being an athlete is harder than being a researcher.
Nontheless, if I can get a chance, I want to attend a swimming competition for amateur in some day.
Nontheless, if I can get a chance, I want to attend a swimming competition for amateur in some day.
>>Nonetheless, if I would have the chance, I want to be part of a swimming competition for amateurs some day.
And I think swimming is best excercise to me.
>>And I think swimming is the best exercise for me.
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