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2017-03-08 · 첨삭 강사 Lynn

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Nowadays technology helps education. However, we have to learn to use technology. In my case it is not easy to use technology. For exampley, I have a smart phone it has various functions but I don't know to use it I only use to call and check email. But many young people use a lot of technology and than they learn technology and they use it with their education. I think it is a good way to learn. However, many young people don't like to read books because they get a lot of information with technology like internet.

강사 첨삭

Hello there Ms. [이름]!
You are right. The younger generation would rather use the internet than open a book or go to the library. Well, everything has advantages and disadvantages. Great job, Ms. [이름]!
Take care!
~T. Lynn
Nowadays technology helps education.
>> correct!
However, we have to learn to use technology.
>> correct!
In my case, it is not easy to use technology.
>> correct
For example, I have a smart phone it has various functions but I don\'t know to use it I only use to call and check email.
>> For example, I have a smart phone. It has various functions but I don\'t know to use it. I only use it to call and check email.
But many young people use a lot of technology and than they learn technology and they use it with their education.
>> But many young people use a lot of technology. They learn how to use technology to enhance their education.
I think it is a good way to learn.
>> correct!
However, many young people don\'t like to read books because they get a lot of information with technology like internet.
>> However, many young people don\'t like to read books because they get a lot of information using technology like the internet.

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