11/8 homework and ielts writing task1

2017-11-09 · 첨삭 강사 Dianne

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IELTS This Chart shows how much people spend their income on 3 type of items in 2002. Generally, food, drinks and tobacco took the top among these products. This essay will explain national consumer expenditure. Firstly, the percentage of food in the Ireland and the Turkey more accounted for around 30%, rather than other countries recorded under 20%. Secondly, only the Italian spent 9 % of their income buying clothings and footwears. On the other hand, the percentage of expenditure on fashion in other four countries marked up under 7%. And then, the proportion of leisure and education in Ireland and Spain accounted for around 2%. But these in Italy, Sweden and Turkey took up around 4%. To sum it up, this reseach shows that the food category took the top among these products in any country. Besides, the following runner is cloth, and then leisure HOMEWORK 1. Does the monkey eat an apple 2. Tom reads some books every month 3. This is a excellent test 4. Please buy me a little hams..

강사 첨삭

Hi, Allen!

Thank you for doing your homework again.

I also appreciate this composition you\'ve made.

I\'m glad to help you with it.

See you later!

_Teacher Dianne ^^

IELTS
This Chart shows how much people spend their income on 3 type of items in 2002.

>> This Chart shows how people spend their income on 3 types of items in 2002.

Generally, food, drinks and tobacco took the top among these products. This essay will explain national consumer expenditure.

>> Generally, the food, drinks, and tobacco took the top among these products. This essay will explain the national consumer expenditure.

Firstly, the percentage of food in the Ireland and the Turkey more accounted for around 30%, rather than other countries recorded under 20%.

>> Firstly, the percentage of food in Ireland and the Turkey more accounted for around 30%, rather than other countries recorded under 20%.

Secondly, only the Italian spent 9 % of their income buying clothings and footwears. On the other hand, the percentage of expenditure on fashion in other four countries marked up under 7%. And then, the proportion of leisure and education in Ireland and Spain accounted for around 2%. But these in Italy, Sweden and Turkey took up around 4%.

>> Secondly, only the Italians spent 9 % of their income buying clothings and footwears. On the other hand, the percentage of the expenditure on fashion in the other four countries marked up under 7% and then, the proportion of leisure and education in Ireland and Spain accounted for around 2%, but these things in Italy, Sweden and Turkey took up at around 4%.

To sum it up, this reseach shows that the food category took the top among these products in any country. Besides, the following runner is cloth, and then leisure

>> To sum it up, this research shows that the food category took the top among these products in every country. Clothing and footwear is next to it and leisure took the last.

HOMEWORK

>> correct
1. Does the monkey eat an apple?

>> correct
2. Tom reads some books every month.

>> correct
3. This is a excellent test

>>This is an excellent test.
4. Please buy me a little hams..

>> Please buy me a little hamster.

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