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2018-10-19 · 첨삭 강사 Glenda

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I am a part of the marketing department with members. I am a manager in my team. I am in charge of the export, collecting data and writing reports for my team. When my co-workers have some problems, I write reports instead of them. It was my first job and I want to work for a long time here. I like my job.

강사 첨삭

I am a part of the marketing department with members.

>> I am a part of a marketing department.
 I am a manager in my team.

>> Correct
 I am in charge of the export, collecting data and writing reports for my team.

>> Correct

or

>>  I am in-charge of export, data collection and writing reports for my team.
 When my co-workers have some problems, I write reports instead of them.

>> When my co-workers /team members face a problem, I write the reports instead of them.
 It was my first job and I want to work for a long time here. 

>> It was my first job and I want to here for a long time.
 I like my job.

>> Correct

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