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2018-11-05 · 첨삭 강사 Jedah

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Yes, I think they should help poorer nations. But they should support too much. I think overcoming poor is up to their nations. At start, it could be difficult to increase their job opportunities to improve their economy. So if wealthy nations share their wealth at that time, it could be a big help. But steady help can be poisonous to them. I read an article that explains poor nations want money but they don't want to educate their children even though they were given money from a charity. I think it's a serious problem. Education is the most important part of nations' future. So I think wealthy nations have to share their money to build productive building. But they should not give them too much money. Wealthy nations must help poorer nations until they have at least self-sustaining power. But I have a few idea about economy so I know it could be wrong. PS. Finally weekend comes! I made a example about the word "right" I was right about my x-boy friend. He sometimes acted werid.

강사 첨삭

Hi [이름]! A Happy Monday to you! What are you looking forward to for this week? ^ ^

You gave a very good point on this one. You could be an economist! ^^ It is morally right to help especially those who are in need, but in the case of poor nations; foreign aid doesn\'t equal development. They should be helped in establishing a sustainable livelihood and not become mendicants to other nations. ^ ^

-Teacher Jedah

Yes, I think they should help poorer nations.

>>Correct

But they should support too much.

>>But they should not support too much.

I think overcoming poor is up to their nations.

>>I think overcoming poverty is up to their nations.

At start, it could be difficult to increase their job opportunities to improve their economy.

>>At first, it could be difficult to increase their job opportunities to improve their economy.

So if wealthy nations share their wealth at that time, it could be a big help.

>>Correct

But steady help can be poisonous to them.

>>Correct

>>But constant help can be poisonous to them.

I read an article that explains poor nations want money but they don\'t want to educate their children even though they were given money from a charity.

>>Correct

I think it\'s a serious problem.

>>Correct

Education is the most important part of nations\' future.

>>Education plays an important part to a nations\' future.

So I think wealthy nations have to share their money to build productive building.

>>So I think wealthy nations have to share their money to build productive buildings.

But they should not give them too much money.

>>Correct

Wealthy nations must help poorer nations until they have at least self-sustaining power.

>>Correct

But I have a few idea about economy so I know it could be wrong.

>>But I only have limited knowledge about economy, so I could be wrong.

PS. Finally weekend comes!

>>Woohoooo

I made a example about the word \"right\"

>>I made a sentence about the word \"right\".

I was right about my x-boy friend. He sometimes acted werid.

>>I was right about my ex boyfriend. He sometimes acted weird!

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