111. Homework

2018-05-03 · 첨삭 강사 Rose

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ESSAY: How realistic is the expectation of job satisfaction for all workers? I think more than 80 percent of people think that their salary is not suitable for their efforts to the company. It’s because most incomes go to the executives and just few amount of money goes to lots of employees in Korea society. Thus, they will complain until this kind of cultures regarding wealth distribution has to be changed. And there is another reason why people cannot feel satisfies. It’s because they only do compare and complain their situations around their relatives without any efforts. At least, if they feel unfair, they should try to change their job from the challenges such as studying hard to get licenses showing their abilities to the headhunter, or try to work hard while they spend waste time for complaining. But, sadly, most people didn’t. In this case, it’s not only a society problem but also their problem too. In my opinion, if they have enough abilities, they can change their job or position whatever they want. And the incomes will follow automatically how much they want. And then, do not stop eager to do something is a kind of natural characteristic belongs human. For example, a person whom was envied by the others owing to a good position and enough property might complain his situation because he will compare his situation with the high ranker. That’s why it’s very hard to make all workers feel satisfied.

강사 첨삭

Satisfaction is highly subjective, I believe!

Whenever I feel down, I just think of the people who were dreaming for something I am blessed to have.

See you and thanks, Jason~

ESSAY: How realistic is the expectation of job satisfaction for all workers?
>>CORRECT!
I think more than 80 percent of people think that their salary is not suitable for their efforts to the company.

>>I think more than 80 percent of people think that their salary is not suitable for their efforts for the company.

It’s because most incomes go to the executives and just few amount of money goes to lots of employees in Korea society.

>>It’s because most income go to the executives and just a little amount of money goes to lots of employees in Korean society.

Thus, they will complain until this kind of cultures regarding wealth distribution has to be changed.
>>
Thus, they will complain until this kind of culture regarding wealth distribution has to be changed.
And there is another reason why people cannot feel satisfies.

>>And there is another reason why people cannot feel satisfied.

It’s because they only do compare and complain their situations around their relatives without any efforts.

>>It’s because they only do compare and complain of their situations around their relatives without any effort.

 At least, if they feel unfair, they should try to change their job from the challenges such as studying hard to get licenses showing their abilities to the headhunter, or try to work hard while they spend waste time for complaining.

>> At least, if they feel unfair, they should try to change their job from the challenges such as studying hard to get licenses showing their abilities to the headhunter, or try to work hard while instead of wasting time for complaining.

But, sadly, most people didn’t.

>>CORRECT!

In this case, it’s not only a society problem but also their problem too.

>>In this case, it’s not only a societal problem but their problem too.

In my opinion, if they have enough abilities, they can change their job or position whatever they want.

>>In my opinion, if they have enough abilities, they can change their job or position to whatever they want.

And the incomes will follow automatically how much they want.
>>
And the income will follow automatically.
And then, do not stop eager to do something is a kind of natural characteristic belongs human.

>>And then, being eager to do something is a kind of natural human characteristic.

 For example, a person whom was envied by the others owing to a good position and enough property might complain his situation because he will compare his situation with the high ranker.
>>
 For example, a person who was envied by the others owing to his good position and enough property might complain of his situation as he compares his situation to that of a high ranker.
 That’s why it’s very hard to make all workers feel satisfied.

>>CORRECT!


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