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A Wonderful day to you [이름]! Thank you for doing your homework, I appreciate it! ^ ^

You made a very strong point and a good start with your essay. You sound like you have already been doing a lot of inspirational speeches. But kidding aside, you gave a good point. Why not? If you have a dream go for it, or if you dare dream, why not dream big, regardless of what others may say. It\'s a sad thing that your father discouraged you the most. But I hope you would see it as a motivation and use it to become the best version of you! ^ ^

-Teacher Jedah

It\'s a very interesting question!

>>Correct 

If I could address the whole world, I would like to say \"Have a big dream!\"

>>Correct 

When I was young, my parents wanted me to become a goverment official or school teacher.

>>When I was young, my parents wanted me to become a goverment official or a school teacher. (almost perfect! don\'t forget your \"a\")  

Because it\'s a very stable job in Korea.

>>Correct or

>>Because they say that these are stable jobs in Korea.

I thought those were good jobs but now, I know those are not jobs that I want.

>>I thought they were good jobs; but now, I know they are not the jobs that I want. 

But I didn\'t know at then.

>>But I didn\'t know it then. (typo error-at? )

I couldn\'t get a chance to think about my future job because I thought my parents are always right.

>>I didn\'t have the chance to think about my future job because I thought my parents were always right.  

And in school, teachers always told us we should study hard because of an university.

>>And in school, teachers always told us that we should study hard to be able to get into a good university.

But I think it\'s not the only way to become an excellent adult.

>>Correct

Incredibly, my father said he didn\'t want me to go to a better university in Seoul because I am a woman.

>>Incredibly, my father said he didn\'t want me to go to the best university in Seoul because I am a woman.

I lost my motivation to study and I was miserable.

>>Correct

If I can turn back the time, I\'ll ignore my parents and study hard.

>>Correct 

Some people say age is not important.

>>Correct 

I agree but if I could realize he was wrong, I can do more than that.

>>I agree, but if only I realized earlier that my father was wrong, I could have done more. 

So have a big dream careless others!

>>So, have big dreams and care less about what others might say!