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2018-11-16 · 첨삭 강사 Jedah

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What can you say about Artificial Intelligence? Do you think they would rule the world in the future and eradicate humanity? I think Artificial Intelligence(AI) would rule the world and eradicate humanity in one century. For example, Siri, a kind of software of iphone, is intelligent. Nowadays, we are farmiliar with it. So I believe that researchers about AI already invented more smarter softwares. I was told China is a powerful about AI now. They observe their people by artificial camera. When I saw an article about Chinese AI Technology, I felt scared. Someday, AI will have their thoughts and they will be smarter than humanity. So we will be undercontrolled by them someday! I think it will not happend in my life and I hope. But If AI could fee the feeling \"love\", they can fall in love with human! There could be a lot of hypothesis. So I think we should prepare a lot of cases. But not in my life^^ PS. Finally we got our Friday!! We can take a rest for two days. I always thank you!

강사 첨삭

Hi [이름]! Thank you for doing your homework! ^ ^

Yes! It\'s Friday! We made it through the week. You are right! We can take a rest this weekend! ^ ^

Nice thoughts on this one. We can never know what\'s in store for us in the future, whether the world would be ruled by robots, an alien invasion, Zombie Apocalypse! Who knows?! And I also don\'t know how to prepare for these possibilities. Well I guess, all we can do is just hope for the best for humanity! ^ ^

-Teacher Jedah  


I think Artificial Intelligence(AI) would rule the world and eradicate humanity in one century.

>>Correct (your sentence is correct but I couldn\'t quite grasp what you mean; in one century-like they will conquer and rule the world for 100 years or they will rule the world in the future a hundred years from now?)

For example, Siri, a kind of software of iphone, is intelligent.

>>Correct

Nowadays, we are farmiliar with it.

>>Nowadays, we are familiar with it. (correct sentence; typo error with \"familiar\")

So I believe that researchers about AI already invented more smarter softwares.

>>So I believe that researchers about AI have already invented a much smarter software. 

I was told China is a powerful about AI now.

>>I was told that China is leading when it comes to the use AI.

They observe their people by artificial camera.

>>Correct or

>>They observe their people with artificial intelligence cameras.

When I saw an article about Chinese AI Technology, I felt scared.

>>Correct

Someday, AI will have their thoughts and they will be smarter than humanity.

>>Someday, AI will develop their own intelligence and will be smarter than us; humans.

So we will be undercontrolled by them someday!

>>That means we will be under their control someday!

I think it will not happend in my life and I hope.

>>I think and I hope that it will not happen in my lifetime. 

But If AI could fee the feeling \"love\", they can fall in love with human!

>>But if AI would also develop their emotions and feelings, it\'s possible that they may fall in love with humans! 

There could be a lot of hypothesis.

>>There could be a lot of hypotheses. (plural: hypotheses)

So I think we should prepare a lot of cases.

>>Correct or

>>So I think we must be prepared with these possibilities.

But not in my life^^

>>Correct or

>>But I hope it won\'t happen during my lifetime or this lifetime. ^ ^

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