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Combating climate change needs considerable investment and strengthened climate laws and policies.
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I have interested in environmental issues since I was a college student.
>> I have been interested in environmental issues since I was a college student.
After graduating from college, I focused on studying how international environmental regulations effect businesses and environmental management strategies at Graduate School of Climate Specialisation.
>> After graduating college, I focused on studying how international environmental regulations affects businesses and environmental management strategies at Graduate School of Climate Specialisation.
During the project, I became interested in Carbon Capture and Storage (CCS) technology.
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The use of fossil fuels among global energy consumption is expected to keep increasing, but the technology can help the energy transition from fossil fuels to a green energy.
>> The use of fossil fuels among global energy consumption is expected to keep on increasing, but the technology can help the energy transition from fossil fuels to a green energy.
For further studying, I studied CCS risk management system in China for my master’s dissertation.
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Nonetheless, I realised that it is infeasible for all fossil-fuel industries to use CCS technology due to many reasons like technology levels and political conflicts.
>> Nonetheless, I realised that it is not feasible for all fossil-fuel industries to use CCS technology due to many reasons, like technology levels and political conflicts.
Therefore, I wondered how other businesses deal with state’s climate-change measures.
>> Therefore, I wondered how other businesses deal with State climate-change measures.
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