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2018-11-27 · 첨삭 강사 Jedah

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If we could make molecule-sized robots, what could we do with them? I think it would be useful in surgeries. The important thing in suegeries is a sophisticated handling. If we could use molecule-sized robots, it could do anything we couldn\'t do like eliminating cancers. Perhaps, we can solve an issue about eternal life through the robots! BecauseI I thought aging is a problem about molecules. Or, it could be bad robots if these are used by stalkers. Police may not catch them quickly because it\'s too tiny. Maybe it could be used by military. If they use the robots in a war, it could be a disaster. If someone invents molecule-sized robots, the government must regulate the robots. I think if someone buys a molecule-sized robot, our government must have their ID information. PS. I think I am usually going serious in my homework. lol And I\'m sorry about my late homeworks. I\'ll do it step by step! Hage a nice day Teacher!

강사 첨삭

Hi [이름]! A Terrific Tuesday to you! I hope you start it right and end it awesome!  ^ ^ I appreciate you taking time in doing your homework. Don\'t worry about the previous ones, you know what they say; \"better late than never\". At least I know you are exerting your effort in doing them. It\'s a good practice to hone your skill. ^ ^

We have the same thing in mind, these robots can cure diseases. I never thought of it as being used in a negative way though! Nice thoughts! ^ ^

-Teacher Jedah



I think it would be useful in surgeries.

>>Correct 

The important thing in suegeries is a sophisticated handling.

>>The important thing in surgeries is sophisticated handling.

>>The important thing in surgeries is careful handling. 

If we could use molecule-sized robots, it could do anything we couldn\'t do like eliminating cancers.

>>If we could use molecule-sized robots, it could do anything we couldn\'t do like eliminating cancer cells. 

Perhaps, we can solve an issue about eternal life through the robots!

>>Correct

BecauseI I thought aging is a problem about molecules.

>>Because I thought aging is a problem about molecules. (correct sentence, typo error) 

Or, it could be bad robots if these are used by stalkers.

>>Or they could turn into bad robots if acquired and used by corrupt and destructive people. 

Police may not catch them quickly because it\'s too tiny.

>>Police may not catch them quickly because they are too tiny.

Maybe it could be used by military.

>>Correct

If they use the robots in a war, it could be a disaster.

>>Correct 

If someone invents molecule-sized robots, the government must regulate the robots.

>>Correct or

>>If someone invents molecule-sized robots, the government must regulate the issuance and use of these robots. 

I think if someone buys a molecule-sized robot, our government must have their ID information.

>>Correct or

>>I think if someone buys a molecule-sized robot, our government must have their complete and thorough information.

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