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2018-12-04 · 첨삭 강사 Jedah

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I\'d like to have a flying or teleport ability. Because I take many times in buses. My school was far from my home so I should take two buses and one subway. If I could fly, I can save my time. But I think flyinf is an exercise too. And If I have a flying ability, I should hide my ability so I\'ll have to fly high. But you know, the more higher, the more cooler. So if I have to choose one, I\'ll choose teleport ability. I don\'t need to reserve a plane ticket and I don\'t need to prepare for my plan in advance, either! I love seeing the view over the train\'s window but I want that it is a option. If I\'m busy, I could teleport to everywhere! But maybe some people bother me because I have a superpower. So I\'ll hide my ability even for my close friends! And I\'ll travel around the world. I don\'t need to work in bakery anymore, so I\'ll quit the job. Or I can earn money through my ability. I hope I\'ll get some superpowers.^^ PS. I hope you had a wonderful day!

강사 첨삭

Hi [이름]! Wonderful of you to catch up with your homework! Good girl! ^ ^ Great powers come great responsibilities! This is according to Spiderman! ^ ^ It is really interesting to imagine having superpowers; mind control, shape shifting, invisibility! I wish I could have one too! ^ ^

-Teacher Jedah  



I\'d like to have a flying or teleport ability.

>>Correct

Because I take many times in buses.

>>Because I ride a bus a lot of times. 

My school was far from my home so I should take two buses and one subway.

>>My school is far from my home, so I take two bus rides and a subway ride. 

If I could fly, I can save my time. But I think flyinf is an exercise too.

>>If I could fly, I can save my time, and I think, flying is an exercise too. 

And If I have a flying ability, I should hide my ability so I\'ll have to fly high.

>>If I have a flying ability, I must hide my ability so I need to fly high. 

But you know, the more higher, the more cooler.

>>But, the higher I fly, the colder it gets.

So if I have to choose one, I\'ll choose teleport ability.

>>Correct 

I don\'t need to reserve a plane ticket and I don\'t need to prepare for my plan in advance, either!

>>Correct 

I love seeing the view over the train\'s window but I want that it is a option.

>>I love seeing the view outside my train\'s window but I want that as an option. 

If I\'m busy, I could teleport to everywhere!

>>If I\'m busy with a lot of things, I could teleport everywhere.

But maybe some people bother me because I have a superpower.

>>But maybe, if people would find out about my superpowers, they would bother me. 

So I\'ll hide my ability even for my close friends!

>>So I\'ll hide my ability even to my close friends!

And I\'ll travel around the world.

>>Correct

I don\'t need to work in bakery anymore, so I\'ll quit the job.

>>I don\'t need to work in a bakery anymore, so I\'ll quit the job. 

Or I can earn money through my ability.

>>Correct

I hope I\'ll get some superpowers.^^

>>I wish I have superpowers.^ ^

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