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2018-11-29 · 첨삭 강사 May

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HOMEWORK: WRITING TASK Answer the question in 5 sentences. How happy are you compared with your friends? => I always wonder what the standard of happiness is. I still couldn't find the answer. My friends are happy, but i also try to live happily. I have 2 happiness more than my friends. The first thing is that i got married faster than them, and my children grew up. And secondly, i got a job the fastest. They are always envy me.

강사 첨삭

Hi [이름]! I think that you are really a happy person.

Your family is your happiness. You are just lucky that you

have a beautiful family and a nice job. ^^

~~May~~

I always wonder what the standard of happiness is.
 I still couldn\'t find the answer.
My friends are happy, but i also try to live happily.

>> Correct
 I have 2 happiness more than my friends.

>> But I think I happier than my friends.
 The first thing is that i got married faster than them, and my children grew up.

>> First, I got married earlier than them and my children have already grown up.

And secondly, i got a job the fastest. They are always envy me.

>> And secondly, I got my job easily. They always envy me.

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