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Q. In some countries having children is considered a way of "investing in the future",
and young people are expected to give money to their parents when they get a job,
and then to care for them when they retire.
What are the good points and what are the bad points about this system?
=>It is good question. I've always been worring about it.
I can be difficult to tell the good and the bad points.
These days, young people who they got married are not a baby. Because it costs a lot of money for children. Private education costs have spent a lot of. Most of peoples think so.
But, there are the good points that if they living between the couple without children, they can only enjoy the abundant life. and then, They are descendants will be lost.
On the contrary, we have to realize that if we don't have a child, economic population is reduced, the country can be dangerous.
Korea is on its way to becoming an aging society. This is a serious problem.
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Hi [이름]! How are you? Yes. This is a good question for everyone and I know that
this is one of your country\'s concern. Thanks for sharing your opinions and I appreciate that.
Be thankful and happy because you have a wonderful family.
Have a good weekend! ^^
~~May~~
It is good question.>> It is a good question.
I\'ve always been worring about it.
>> CORRECT
>> Spelling: WORRYING
I can be difficult to tell the good and the bad points.
I can be difficult to tell the good and the bad points.
>> CORRECT
These days, young people who they got married are not a baby. Because it costs a lot of money for children.
These days, young people who they got married are not a baby. Because it costs a lot of money for children.
>> These days, young people who get married don\'t try to have a baby because it costs a lot of money to raise children.
Private education costs have spent a lot of. Most of peoples think so.
>> Private education costs a lot of money and most people think about it.
But, there are the good points that if they living between the couple without children, they can only enjoy the abundant life.
But, there are the good points that if they living between the couple without children, they can only enjoy the abundant life.
>> But the good point is that a family living together happily is like having an abundant life.
and then, They are descendants will be lost.
>> The descendants will also be gone.
On the contrary, we have to realize that if we don\'t have a child, economic population is reduced, the country can be dangerous.
On the contrary, we have to realize that if we don\'t have a child, economic population is reduced, the country can be dangerous.
>> On the contrary, we have to realize that if there are no children, the birth rate of the country will be decreased and that is also alarming.
Korea is on its way to becoming an aging society. This is a serious problem.
Korea is on its way to becoming an aging society. This is a serious problem.
>> Korea is the country that has the lowest birth rate and this is a serious problem.
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