114. Homework
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강사 첨삭
Thank you very much, Jason^^
Personally, I prefer to have a small family, so I could focus on my each of my children\'s needs.
Have a great day and see you~
ESSAY: Would you like to have a large family? Why or why not?
>>CORRECT!
I’d like to have a small family instead of having a large family.
>>CORRECT!
The reasons are stated below.
>>CORRECT!
First, large family gets a lot of mouths rather than small family.
>>First, a large family feeds a lot of mouths rather than a small family.
Thus, it makes me spending money more and I should have to give up the things that I want to buy for maintaining the large family.
>>Thus, it makes me spend more money, and I have to give up the things that I want to buy to maintain the large family.
Second, I will get plenty of stress points if I have a large family.
>>CORRECT!
It’s because I am a person who like to control all of the things in my boundary.
>> It’s because I am a person who likes to control all of the things within my boundary.
Third, in my opinion, if I have something more it means someday I will lose more.
>>Third, in my opinion, if I have more of something, it means someday I will lose more.
I had realized it while I reared hamster, dogs, and chicks.
>> I had realized it when I reared a hamster, dogs, and chicks.
Every single time, it gave me unexpected sorrow when it was gone.
>>CORRECT!
These reasons are why I prefer having small family.
>>These are the reasons why I prefer to have a small family.
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