116. Homework

2018-05-10 · 첨삭 강사 Rose

학생이 쓴 원문

ESSAY: Is generosity always a good thing? Most people easily forget a favor which comes from the generosity. It’s a kind of same theory called a frog in the boiling pot. There is an idea for example; there was a girl who used to share her meals such as bread to the homeless on the road for a long time while she was on the way home even though she was not enough foods to eat. Someday, she didn’t have enough money to buy foods so she decided she wouldn’t give anything to them. So, while she went home, she didn’t give them and, few days ago, she had damage gotten from the beggars. It’s because they thought she betrayed them since she didn’t give them what they would eat. I think the strangers had never thought the actions which were acted by her were her kindness. That’s why they made her harm. In conclusion, I think giving generosity is not always good way.

강사 첨삭

Thank you very much for this essay, Jason~

Some people think that being generous is eternally good, but I hate it when some people still complain of what they have received or worse, feel betrayed if one day you failed to give them something.

See you!

ESSAY: Is generosity always a good thing?
>>CORRECT!
Most people easily forget a favor which comes from the generosity.
>>
Most people easily forget a favor which comes from generosity.
It’s a kind of same theory called a frog in the boiling pot.
>>It’s a kind of same theory called \"a frog in the boiling pot\".
There is an idea for example; there was a girl who used to share her meals such as bread to the homeless on the road for a long time while she was on the way home even though she was not enough foods to eat.

>>There is an idea for example; there was a girl who used to share her meals such as bread to the homeless on the road for a long time while she was on the way home even though she did not have enough food to eat.

 Someday, she didn’t have enough money to buy foods so she decided she wouldn’t give anything to them

>>Someday, she didn’t have enough money to buy food, so she decided she wouldn’t give anything to them.
 So, while she went home, she didn’t give them and, few days ago, she had damage gotten from the beggars.

>> So, when she went home, she didn’t give them and, a few days ago, she got injured by the beggars.

It’s because they thought she betrayed them since she didn’t give them what they would eat.

>>CORRECT!

 I think the strangers had never thought the actions which were acted by her were her kindness.

>> I think the strangers had never thought about the actions that showed her kindness.

That’s why they made her harm.
>>
That’s why they harmed her.
In conclusion, I think giving generosity is not always good way.

>>In conclusion, I don\'t think giving generosity is always a good thing.

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