118. Homework

2018-05-17 · 첨삭 강사 Rose

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ESSAY: If you could ask a famous person one question, what would you ask? If I meet a person who is famous for a criminal, I would ask him or her this question, “Have you ever regretted the day that you had made the crime?”. It’s because I think most of them may regret a kind of mistake since some of cause were made by accidentally. Following that curious, I want to meet Ms.Park or Mr.Lee who was previous president in Korea ask them about same question. That's because they corrupted taxes. Furthermore, she just looked on children to be dying into the deep in the ocean when they took falling ship few years ago. But, I think they have never regret even once, that’s why they always complains they were victims and they felt unfairness in the court. Hence, I am curious if they are human or not. In my opinion, they should ask a favor and forgiveness from others for their terrible mistakes and problems if they are real human who can feel empathy others sorrow.

강사 첨삭

Thank you very much, Jason^^

These questions are sensible to be asked to those people TT

Have a great day, and see you!

ESSAY: If you could ask a famous person one question, what would you ask?
>>CORRECT!
If I meet a person who is famous for a criminal, I would ask him or her this question, “Have you ever regretted the day that you had made the crime?”.

>>If I meet a person who is famous for being a criminal, I would ask him or her this question, “Have you ever regretted the day that you had committed the crime?”.
It’s because I think most of them may regret a kind of mistake since some of cause were made by accidentally.

>>It’s because I think most of them may regret a kind of mistake since some crimes were committed accidentally.
 Following that curious, I want to meet Ms.Park or Mr.Lee who was previous president in Korea ask them about same question.

>>Following that curiosity I want to meet Ms. [Name] or Mr. [Name] who were previous presidents of Korea and ask them the same question.

That\'s because they corrupted taxes.

>>CORRECT!

 Furthermore, she just looked on children to be dying into the deep in the ocean when they took falling ship few years ago.

>> Furthermore, she just looked on the children dying into the deep ocean when they took the sunken ship a few years ago.

But, I think they have never regret even once, that’s why they always complain they were victims and they felt unfairness in the court.

>>But, I think they have never regretted even once, that’s why they always complains they were victims and they felt inequality in the court.

 Hence, I am curious if they are human or not.

>> Hence, I am curious if they are humans or not.
In my opinion, they should ask a favor and forgiveness from others for their terrible mistakes and problems if they are real human who can feel empathy others sorrow.

>>In my opinion, they should ask a favor and forgiveness from others for their terrible mistakes and problems if they are real human who can feel empathy towards others\' sorrow.

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