12/03

2013-12-03 · 첨삭 강사 Rose

학생이 쓴 원문

Good morning~! T.winnie(?). I'm really sorry but I'm not sure your name. ^^;; As you know, yesterday was our first class. From tommorrow, I will call you correctly. Nowadays, it's very cold in Korea. So I wear several clothes on my body. Sometimes I feel uncomfortable but it makes me warm and prevents to catch a cold. How about weather in your region ? I heard that your office is located in high height so it is a little cold. And I remembered my previous teature caught a cold. Even if she didn't tell me about that, I just realized that when I had heard her voice. Do you have any plan before your work ? I will report the result of the internal audit of a vessel to my team head. And I should prepare some materials for another inspection, which is planned on the upcoming weekend. Oh~~ no... I don't like any sckedule for a weekend because a weekend is only time for meeting my family. ;;;; Anyway, have a good day and see you in our class. Bye~!!

강사 첨삭

Hi there! Good morning!

How are you doing? And how\'s the weather in Korea makes you feel this time?

Anyways, I hope you\'ll do good on your report about the internal audit of a vessel. I know you can do it well.

Regarding your composition, I can see that you can express your ideas well. I can see the confidence in you in doing so.

As your teacher, that makes me proud of you.

See you then in our next class. Have a great day!

~ T. Winnie ~

I\'m really sorry but I\'m not sure your name. ^^;;

>> I\'m really sorry, but I\'m not sure of your name.
As you know, yesterday was our first class.

>> CORRECT!
From tommorrow, I will call you correctly.

>> Starting tomorrow, I\'ll call you by your name correctly.
Nowadays, it\'s very cold in Korea. So I wear several clothes on my body.

>> CORRECT!

OR >> Now, it\'s very cold here in Korea, so I have to wear several clothes.
Sometimes I feel uncomfortable but it makes me warm and prevents to catch a cold.

>>  Sometimes I feel uncomfortable, but it makes me feel warm and it prevents me from catching a cold.
How about weather in your region ? I heard that your office is located in high height so

>> What about the weather in your region? I heard that your office is located at a high height.
it is a little cold.

>> So, it is a little colder.
And I remembered my previous teature caught a cold. Even if she didn\'t tell me about that,

>> And I remember my previous teacher caught a cold even if she didn\'t tell me about it.
I just realized that when I had heard her voice.

>> CORRECT!

>> I just realized it when I heard her voice.
Do you have any plan before your work ?

>> Do you have any plans before your work?
I will report the result of the internal audit of a vessel to my team head.

>> CORRECT!

>> I will be reporting the result of the internal audit of a vessel to my team head.
And I should prepare some materials for another inspection, which is planned on the upcoming weekend.

>> CORRECT!
Oh~~ no... I don\'t like any sckedule for a weekend because a weekend is only time for meeting my family. ;;;;

>> Oh! No! I don\'t like any schedules during weekends because it is the only time for me to meet my family.
Anyway, have a good day and see you in our class. Bye~!!

>> CORRECT!

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