12-03
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>> If capitalism is so great, why are there many people living below the poverty line in capitalist countries?
Actually Capitalism is agreed with failed ideology by the social science society.
>> Actually, capitalism is a result of the failed ideology of socialism.
To complement problems of Capitalism, Modified Capitalism which accepted intervention of the gorvernment and Neoliberalism which complemented Modified Capitalism were introduced however, those were failed to bring happiness to all as Capitalism did.
>> To complement the problems of capitalism, Modified Capitalism which accepted government intervention and Neoliberalism which complemented Modified Capitalism were introduced however, both failed to bring happiness to all as much as capitalism has done.
Not to mention the ideology of communism, which is against capitalism, was a disaster.
>> correct
There is no perfect ideology to be able to sure to not make the poverty.
>> There is no perfect ideology that can eradicate poverty.
This is because all we are humans who are never able to become perfect.
>> This is because we are only humans and can never become perfect.
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