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2018-12-13 · 첨삭 강사 Jedah

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[Imagine that you found a big bag of cash on the street or sidewalk, would you take it to the police, or keep it for yourself? Using this question, if the money was taken by the person who saw it, do you think that this person should be convicted of a crime even though he did not steal?] This is a "foolish thing." If it was me, I will not touch the money if I can not go to the police immediately. But, anyway if the person who found a big bag of cash go to the police with the bag even not immediately, I think it should be declared not guilty. We can find similar situation in the real society. Many people don't want to relate a criminal act, they pretend not to see. Sometimes, it make a terrible accident that someone leading to death. Or, although some people help an man who required support, but the person is misunderstood as a convict. These things make the world to selfish more and more. Often excessive attention is not good, but we have a minimum consideration.

강사 첨삭

Hi [이름]! Thank you for doing your homework. I appreciate it a lot! ^ ^

I like your thoughts on this one. You have not only expressed your opinion on the matter but expounded on other situations that show that sometimes the world we live in could be very cruel. I wish there is still hope for humanity! ^ ^

-Teacher Jedah



This is a \"foolish thing.\"

>>Correct
If it was me, I will not touch the money if I can not go to the police immediately.

>>Correct 
But, anyway if the person who found a big bag of cash go to the police with the bag even not immediately, I think it should be declared not guilty.

>>If it\'s another person who found a big bag of cash and was not able to go to the police immediately, that person is not liable of guilt. 
We can find similar situation in the real society.

>>We encounter similar situations in our society.
Many people don\'t want to relate a criminal act, they pretend not to see.

>>Many people don\'t want to be involved in a criminal act, so they pretend not to see.
Sometimes, it make a terrible accident that someone leading to death.

>>Sometimes, it could be very fatal leading to death.
Or, although some people help an man who required support, but the person is misunderstood as a convict.

>>Or, it could be that someone who is only trying to help ends up being accused of the crime he did not commit.
These things make the world to selfish more and more.

>>These things create a world of selfishness.
Often excessive attention is not good, but we have a minimum consideration.

>>Often excessive attention is not good, but our society expresses minimum tolerance and consideration.

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