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2018-12-20 · 첨삭 강사 Jean

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>> What can society do to help teenagers who have problems at home? There are many types of problems which can happen at home however, the most frequent incident is the domestic volance statistically. What society can do for domestic violence relief is to regularly conduct psychological tests to identify it early. If a particular problem is found, it is necessary to thoroughly investigate the cause of the student's family dynamically. I think that society can solve the problems at home like this way.

강사 첨삭

Hello!^^

Thank you for sending your homework.

Cheers!
Jean

>> There are many types of problems that can happen at home however, statistically, the most frequent incident is domestic violence.

What society can do for domestic violence relief is to regularly conduct psychological tests to identify it early.

>> or: One thing that society can do to help is to regularly conduct psychological tests to identify the victims early.

If a particular problem is found, it is necessary to thoroughly investigate the cause of the student\'s family dynamically.

>> If a particular problem is found, it is necessary to thoroughly investigate the cause of such issue including the dynamics in the family of the victim.

I think that society can solve the problems at home like this way.

>> From my perspective, this is one of the ways that the society can solve the problems at home.

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