12/18 homework
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I don\'t know what is the effort of my government for the solution of global warming.
Global warming become more serious every year.
When the temperature rises by two degrees Celsius, the sea level rises 10 cm.
It also affects to the soil to grow crops and raise the risk of flood.
Some of islands will disappear within a few years.
In Korea, the government is tightening regulations on global warming gas emissions.
But, I don\'t believe that the just tightening regulations is not the solution.
They have to discuss how can we reduce the global warming.
Power consumption is increasing more and more.
High-technology is developing continuously, people will not back to the past.
My government mentioned the nuclear power plant should disappear and we should use new & renewable energy.
But, the energy production amount is not enough to meet the needs and the power cost will increase.
So, I think the government should put the effort prospectively to find the realistic solution to relieve warming.
강사 첨삭
Hi [이름]! Very well thought of homework. Good job! ^^
-Teacher Jedah
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Global warming become more serious every year.
Global warming become more serious every year.
>>Global warming is becoming serious every year.
When the temperature rises by two degrees Celsius, the sea level rises 10 cm.
When the temperature rises by two degrees Celsius, the sea level rises 10 cm.
>>CORRECT
It also affects to the soil to grow crops and raise the risk of flood.
It also affects to the soil to grow crops and raise the risk of flood.
>>It is also affecting the soil and growing crops and so with the risk of flooding.
Some of islands will disappear within a few years.
Some of islands will disappear within a few years.
>>Some islands will disappear within a few years.
In Korea, the government is tightening regulations on global warming gas emissions.
In Korea, the government is tightening regulations on global warming gas emissions.
>>In Korea, the government is tightening regulations on gas emissions.
But, I don\'t believe that the just tightening regulations is not the solution.
But, I don\'t believe that the just tightening regulations is not the solution.
>>But, I don\'t believe that the just tightening regulations is the only solution.
They have to discuss how can we reduce the global warming.
They have to discuss how can we reduce the global warming.
>>CORRECT
Power consumption is increasing more and more.
Power consumption is increasing more and more.
>>CORRECT
High-technology is developing continuously, people will not back to the past.
High-technology is developing continuously, people will not back to the past.
>>High-technology is developing continuously, people will not go back to the past.
My government mentioned the nuclear power plant should disappear and we should use new & renewable energy.
My government mentioned the nuclear power plant should disappear and we should use new & renewable energy.
>>CORRECT
But, the energy production amount is not enough to meet the needs and the power cost will increase.
But, the energy production amount is not enough to meet the needs and the power cost will increase.
>>CORRECT
So, I think the government should put the effort prospectively to find the realistic solution to relieve warming.
So, I think the government should put the effort prospectively to find the realistic solution to relieve warming.
>>CORRECT
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