12/19 homework
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Yes, I think so.
Now only the fashion industry, many kinds of advertisement is changing.
Nowadays advertisements don\'t show their products at the beginning of the advertisement.
I think advertisements are becoming very emotional and they touch our minds such as empathy and stirring feeling.
The representative example is the advertisements of Nike sports brand.
They show athletes or people who work very hard on their work.
And they wear Nike clothes or shoes.
I think that iPhone has a similar style of advertisement.
People feel many kinds of emotions from those advertisements.
And the image of the brands is getting better and better.
When I buy something, I not only buy the objects, but also new memory and thinking.
And the objects represent a lot of me.
So, people\'s pattern of consumption is becoming very sensitive and the trend is very fast.
I don\'t know it is good thing or bad thing.
But anyway, it means that the selling company should perceive this fast trend and prepare quickly.
강사 첨삭
Hi [이름]! Very well thought of homework. ^ ^
In my opinion, the fashion industry can\'t change their way of advertising, but individual companies can. Because of this, all companies (including fashion brands) have to find new ways to get in front of customers in a way that is relevant. In that way - yes, they have to change (as all companies do) to keep pace with their market.
-Teacher Jedah
>>CORRECT
Now only the fashion industry, many kinds of advertisement is changing.
Now only the fashion industry, many kinds of advertisement is changing.
>>It\'s only the fashion industry, but many kinds of advertisements are changing.
Nowadays advertisements don\'t show their products at the beginning of the advertisement.
Nowadays advertisements don\'t show their products at the beginning of the advertisement.
>>CORRECT
I think advertisements are becoming very emotional and they touch our minds such as empathy and stirring feeling.
I think advertisements are becoming very emotional and they touch our minds such as empathy and stirring feeling.
>>I think advertisements these days are becoming very emotional and they touch our minds such as empathy and stir our emotions.
The representative example is the advertisements of Nike sports brand.
The representative example is the advertisements of Nike sports brand.
>>An example would be the advertisements of Nike sports apparels.
They show athletes or people who work very hard on their work.
They show athletes or people who work very hard on their work.
>>They show athletes or people who work very hard.
And they wear Nike clothes or shoes.
And they wear Nike clothes or shoes.
>>CORRECT
I think that iPhone has a similar style of advertisement.
I think that iPhone has a similar style of advertisement.
>>CORRECT
People feel many kinds of emotions from those advertisements.
People feel many kinds of emotions from those advertisements.
>>CORRECT
And the image of the brands is getting better and better.
And the image of the brands is getting better and better.
>>CORRECT
When I buy something, I not only buy the objects, but also new memory and thinking.
When I buy something, I not only buy the objects, but also new memory and thinking.
>>When I buy something, I do not only focus on the thing but the memory that goes with it.
And the objects represent a lot of me.
And the objects represent a lot of me.
>>CORRECT
So, people\'s pattern of consumption is becoming very sensitive and the trend is very fast.
So, people\'s pattern of consumption is becoming very sensitive and the trend is very fast.
>>CORRECT
I don\'t know it is good thing or bad thing.
I don\'t know it is good thing or bad thing.
>>I don\'t know if it is a good thing or a bad thing.
But anyway, it means that the selling company should perceive this fast trend and prepare quickly.
But anyway, it means that the selling company should perceive this fast trend and prepare quickly.
>>CORRECT
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