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Do you think punishment is a good way to teach people a lesson?
Most people term punishment as violence and insist it must be banned however, the original meaning of punishment is the act that can reduce future behavior.
>> Most people equate punishment with violence and insist that it must be banned however, the word \'punishment\' originated from the is the Latin word \'punier,\' which means correct or an act that can reduce future behavior.
It means that punishment is a good way to teach people a lesson as well as it can be called issential.
>> It means that punishment is a good way to teach people a lesson as well as essential.
Futhermore, the ideal education should have balance between punishment, reinforcment and erasure.
>> Furthermore, an ideal education should have a balance between punishment, reinforcement, and correction.
Of course violent punishment must be rejected but other means of punishment is not bad.
>> It goes without saying that brutal punishments are off limits, but from my perspective, other means of punishment is not bad.
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