12/22 (Essay) Can you play a musical instrument? Or did you play one as a child?
학생이 쓴 원문
Learning musical instrument adds to the quality of life. When we play it, we can focus on, fee comfort, and also get sense of musical.
When I was a young, I used to play piano. At that time, I didn\'t realize how important to practice myself to improve. So, I felt boring while playing piano.
In addition, I played chello when i was middle school. I was captured by beautiful melody of cello. Unfortunally, the place where i learn it is too far to go, i quited it.
Thesedays, I want to learn musical instrument to improve my life. As soon as the situration become better, I planned to restart cello.
강사 첨삭
Hello Miss. [Name]! I am glad to know that you have a musical background. I hope that you continue playing musical instruments again. Have a good day!
>>Learning how to play musical instrument adds to the quality of life.
When we play it, we can focus on, fee comfort, and also get sense of musical.
>>When we play a musical instrument, we can focus, feel comfort, and also get a sense of music as an art form.
When I was a young, I used to play piano.
When I was a young, I used to play piano.
>>CORRECT!
At that time, I didn\'t realize how important to practice myself to improve.
>>At that time, I didn\'t realize how important it is to practice to improve my skills.
So, I felt boring while playing piano.
>>This is why, I felt bored while playing piano.
In addition, I played chello when i was middle school.
In addition, I played chello when i was middle school.
>>In addition, I played the cello when I was in middle school.
I was captured by beautiful melody of cello.
>>I was captured by the beautiful melody of the cello.
Unfortunally, the place where i learn it is too far to go, i quited it.
>>Unfortunately, the place where I study playing it was too far so I quit.
Thesedays, I want to learn musical instrument to improve my life.
Thesedays, I want to learn musical instrument to improve my life.
>>These days, I want to learn how to play musical instruments again to improve my life.
As soon as the situration become better, I planned to restart cello.
>>As soon as the situation become better, I plan to start playing the cello again.
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