12/23 (Essay) Do you like to go to musicals? What is your favorite musical?
학생이 쓴 원문
The Count of Monte Cristo is first musical for me. After the show was ended, I fell in love with musical.
I especially love the way they express their feeling.
\'Laundry\' is Korean musical and it is my favorite musical. It is about people who came to [이름]ul. Some people came [이름]ul for making money, someone came for dream. During the daylife of [이름]ul, they suffer difficulties from reality. When life is so hard, sad and tearful, these musical say let\'s wash it and blow it away with with laundry. Due to a story, it becomes the most precisous muscial.
I think musical is a hobby that costs a little money. So, I can not often watch it, but I would like to go.
New York Broadway and London is famous for musical. So, I wish to go there and enjoy lots of musical.
강사 첨삭
Hello Miss. [Name]! I agree with you. It does cost some money to enjoy watching musicals but it\'s worth it. Cheers to more musicals you will watch in the future!~~T.Dee
The Count of Monte Cristo is first musical for me. After the show was ended, I fell in love with musical.
>>The Count of Monte Cristo is the first musical I watched. After the show ended, I fell in love with musicals.
I especially love the way they express their feeling.
I especially love the way they express their feeling.
>>CORRECT!
\'Laundry\' is Korean musical and it is my favorite musical.
\'Laundry\' is Korean musical and it is my favorite musical.
>>\'Laundry\' is a Korean musical and it is my favorite musical.
It is about people who came to [이름]ul.
>>CORRECT!
Some people came [이름]ul for making money, someone came for dream.
>>Some people come to [이름]ul to make money and others come for their dreams.
During the daylife of [이름]ul, they suffer difficulties from reality.
>>As they struggle with their daily life in [이름]ul, they suffer difficulties from the reality.
When life is so hard, sad and tearful, these musical say let\'s wash it and blow it away with with laundry.
>>When life is so hard, sad and tearful, this musical tells says \"Let\'s wash it and blow it away with like laundry\".
Due to a story, it becomes the most precisous muscial.
>>Because of it\'s story, it is the most precious muscial for me.
I think musical is a hobby that costs a little money. So, I can not often watch it, but I would like to go.
>>I think watching musicals is a hobby that costs a little money. So, I can not often watch it, but I would like to go.
New York Broadway and London is famous for musical. So, I wish to go there and enjoy lots of musical.
New York Broadway and London is famous for musical. So, I wish to go there and enjoy lots of musical.
>>New York Broadway and London are famous for musicals. So, I wish to go there and enjoy lots of musicals.
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