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2016-12-26 · 첨삭 강사 Charlie

학생이 쓴 원문

I cannot live without a computer. Because, I use it for work more efficiently and accurately In my work place and I can play games which is my favorite hobby and learn whatever I want to learn without go to school by using a computer. If there wasn’t invention of a computer in this world, I couldn’t study Japanese by myself and I was not able to live in japan and also come here in Singapore. I really thanks to a computer.

강사 첨삭

Hello [이름]! ^^


The computer is a very useful machine but I think thanking it is going to far. ^^ You can be thankful that it was invented though~~~


All good things,

==Teacher Charlie==



I cannot live without a computer. Because, I use it for work more efficiently and accurately In my work place and I can play games which is my favorite hobby and learn whatever I want to learn without go to school by using a computer. If there wasn’t invention of a computer in this world, I couldn’t study Japanese by myself and I was not able to live in japan and also come here in Singapore. I really thanks to a computer.

>> A machine I cannot live without would be the computer. With the use of the computer, I can work more efficiently and more accurately; Also, I can indulge in my favorite hobby: playing video games. I can also learn whatever I would like to learn without going to a school with the use of the computer and the internet. Without the computer, I could have never learned Japanese by myself and I would have never gone to live in Japan nor in Singapore. This is why I chose the computer as the one machine I could not live without.

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