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2019-01-02 · 첨삭 강사 Jean

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>> Do you know why Christmas is celebrated around the world? I guess that the answer why Christmas is celebrated around the world is a result of combination of Christianity/Catholic's power, colonial history by UK and cultural toadyism. There are not much to say about Christianity/Catholic and colonial history because we all know about the influence of theirs however, I should mention cultural toadyism which is made by the American media. The American media has been making people reguard their culture as the coolest one in the world. I think that it has been working so successful and as an effect, for example, Korean people has embraced Halloween and Thanksgiving into their live although they didn't understand about the meaning of those at all. So I believe that the popularity of Christmas is based on the power of the American media.

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>> Do you know why Christmas is celebrated around the world?

I guess that the answer why Christmas is celebrated around the world is a result of combination of Christianity/Catholic\'s power, colonial history by UK and cultural toadyism.

>>I guess this is a result of the combination of the Catholic\'s power, colonialism by Great Britain, and cultural toadyism.

 There are not much to say about Christianity/Catholic and colonial history because we all know about the influence of theirs however, I should mention cultural toadyism which is made by the American media.

>> There isn\'t much to say about Christianity/Catholic and Great Britain\'s history of colonialism because we are all aware of their influence however, I should mention cultural toadyism which was started and spread by the American media.


 The American media has been making people reguard their culture as the coolest one in the world. 

>>  The American media has been making people regard their culture as the coolest one in the world. 


 I think that it has been working so successful and as an effect, for example, Korean people has embraced Halloween and Thanksgiving into their live although they didn\'t understand about the meaning of those at all.

>> I think that it has been working so successfully and as an effect, Korean people has embraced Halloween and Thanksgiving into their lives although they didn\'t understand the meaning of those holidays at all.


 So I believe that the popularity of Christmas is based on the power of the American media.

>> or: Consequently, I believe that the popularity of Christmas is a result of the power of the American media.

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