12/24 (Essay) Does music have the power to change your mood? How does music affect you?
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Music has been for a long time, and it is found everywhere. Many people say that music have a huge of power. For example, we can communicate with people who have simillar preference of the music, even we don\'t know each other well.
Although music has lots of power, I can\'t agree with music can change my mood. It just emphasize our mood. Because I has never listen music to shift my mood. I can\'t focus to listen music which has reverse mood of mine.
But It can emphasize people\'s mood. For example, we feel happier when we listen fast music at festival.
In my opinion, people are told from music that it understands your feelings. Then, people express their mood under the music.
강사 첨삭
Hello Miss. [Name]! I am impressed with how you understand music so much. Thank you for sharing your ideas on this topic. I hope you\'re having a good day!~~T.Dee
>>Music has been existing for a long time, and it is found everywhere. Many people say that music is powerful.
For example, we can communicate with people who have simillar preference of the music, even we don\'t know each other well.
>>For example, we can communicate with people whom we have similar preference of music, even when we don\'t know each other well.
Although music has lots of power, I can\'t agree with music can change my mood.
Although music has lots of power, I can\'t agree with music can change my mood.
>>Although music has lots of power, I can\'t agree with the idea that music can change my mood.
It just emphasize our mood.
>>It just intensifies our present mood.
Because I has never listen music to shift my mood. I can\'t focus to listen music which has reverse mood of mine.
>>It\'s because I have never listened to music to shift (or change) my mood. I can\'t focus on listening to music which is opposite to my mood.
But It can emphasize people\'s mood. For example, we feel happier when we listen fast music at festival.
>>But instead, it can amplify people\'s mood. For example, we feel happier when we listen to fast music at a festival.
In my opinion, people are told from music that it understands your feelings.
In my opinion, people are told from music that it understands your feelings.
>>In my opinion, people use music to understand their feelings.
Then, people express their mood under the music.
>>Then, people express their mood with music.
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