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2018-12-27 · 첨삭 강사 Jedah

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[Do you think birth order makes a difference in peoples' personality?] Yes, I think so. There is an idiom "Office changes manners" in Korea. It means people can change according to the position or situation where they are. I think sometimes the change can be personality. We learn the manner or how to decision and think during we live. The most influential person to make our spirit is parents. Specially, general Korean parents prescribe the rank according to the birth order. They want that the elder child would be responsible to their younger brother or sister. This is my case. My parents say to me very frequently "take care your younger sister and brother well" and "If we will disappear, you would be sister and brother's parent" I think this environments make me stronger and overcome something difficulty, but, at the same time, it is a burden. As a result, I strongly agree about your question.

강사 첨삭

Hi [이름]! Awesome day to you! ^ ^ Thank you for taking the time in accomplishing your homework. I appreciate it! ^ ^

You gave a clear thought on this one. I would have to agree with you. Birth order, according to studies;  has a powerful impact upon children\'s emotions, behavior and personality development. By a twist of fate a child is born into a particular spot in the family, and from this position, he will have unique emotional experiences. Each spot in the order has it\'s advantages and challenges. ^ ^

-Teacher Jedah



Yes, I think so.

>>Correct
There is an idiom \"Office changes manners\" in Korea.

>>There is a saying in Korea that \"Office changes manners\".
It means people can change according to the position or situation where they are.

>>Correct
I think sometimes the change can be personality.

>>I think this change has something to do with the persons\' personality.
We learn the manner or how to decision and think during we live.

>>We learn the manner of decision making during our lifetime.
The most influential person to make our spirit is parents.

>>The most influential people in influencing us are our parents.
Specially, general Korean parents prescribe the rank according to the birth order.

>>Korean parents in general imposes roles of their children according to their birth order.
They want that the elder child would be responsible to their younger brother or sister.

>>They want that their older child would be responsible to his or her younger siblings.
This is my case.

>>Correct 
My parents say to me very frequently \"take care your younger sister and brother well\" and \"If we will disappear, you would be sister and brother\'s parent\"

>>My parents frequently say; \"take care of your younger sister and brother as well\" and, \"if we would pas away, you will become your siblings\' parent\". 
I think this environments make me stronger and overcome something difficulty, but, at the same time, it is a burden.

>>I think this kind of environment has made me stronger and is able to overcome difficulties but at the same time it\'s a burden.
As a result, I strongly agree about your question.

>>Correct or

>>Hence, I strongly agree with your question.

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