12/26 homework
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You gave a clear thought on this one. I would have to agree with you. Birth order, according to studies; has a powerful impact upon children\'s emotions, behavior and personality development. By a twist of fate a child is born into a particular spot in the family, and from this position, he will have unique emotional experiences. Each spot in the order has it\'s advantages and challenges. ^ ^
-Teacher Jedah
Yes, I think so.
>>Correct
There is an idiom \"Office changes manners\" in Korea.
>>There is a saying in Korea that \"Office changes manners\".
It means people can change according to the position or situation where they are.
>>Correct
I think sometimes the change can be personality.
>>I think this change has something to do with the persons\' personality.
We learn the manner or how to decision and think during we live.
>>We learn the manner of decision making during our lifetime.
The most influential person to make our spirit is parents.
>>The most influential people in influencing us are our parents.
Specially, general Korean parents prescribe the rank according to the birth order.
>>Korean parents in general imposes roles of their children according to their birth order.
They want that the elder child would be responsible to their younger brother or sister.
>>They want that their older child would be responsible to his or her younger siblings.
This is my case.
>>Correct
My parents say to me very frequently \"take care your younger sister and brother well\" and \"If we will disappear, you would be sister and brother\'s parent\"
>>My parents frequently say; \"take care of your younger sister and brother as well\" and, \"if we would pas away, you will become your siblings\' parent\".
I think this environments make me stronger and overcome something difficulty, but, at the same time, it is a burden.
>>I think this kind of environment has made me stronger and is able to overcome difficulties but at the same time it\'s a burden.
As a result, I strongly agree about your question.
>>Correct or
>>Hence, I strongly agree with your question.
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