12/29 homework
학생이 쓴 원문
Recently, lots of married couples don\'t have a child.
They think that it\'s more valuable to enjoy their own lives than to raise their children.
The price of raising a child until he/she become an adult is too expensive, so many couples who don`t have their child live a economically rich life enjoying their hobbies and interests.
They are called \'DINK`.
It means \'double income no kids`.
I could see several DINKs around me, and I also don\'t want to have a child after I get married.
Although I might change my mind when I will get married, I want to focus on my job, interests and leisure now.
강사 첨삭
Hello, Dr. [이름]!
I am sure that you are not the only one thinking of this same thing about having a family of your own. Over the past two decades, more and more South Koreans have not been marrying or not having a child after marriage due to the reasons you stated below. I cannot blame you since the cost is crazy to have even just one child. If majority will think this way, maybe your population will plummet and will impact your economy.
Anyway, I also heard of DINKs from my other students. This may be the more comfortable an easier option to live in your country lately. Well, the grammar suggestions were underscored for your convenience to read and analyze. Read them carefully. Thank you for sending me this composition early to read today!
See you soon.
-T. Donna~
>> Correct!
They think that it\'s more valuable to enjoy their own lives than to raise their children.
>> Correct!
The price of raising a child until he/she become an adult is too expensive, so many couples who don`t have their child live a economically rich life enjoying their hobbies and interests.
The price of raising a child until he/she become an adult is too expensive, so many couples who don`t have their child live a economically rich life enjoying their hobbies and interests.
>> The price of raising a child until he/she becomes an adult is too expensive, so many couples who don`t have their child live an economically rich life enjoying their hobbies and interests.
They are called \'DINK`.
>> Correct!
It means \'double income no kids`.
>> Correct!
I could see several DINKs around me, and I also don\'t want to have a child after I get married.
>> Correct!
Although I might change my mind when I will get married, I want to focus on my job, interests and leisure now.
>> Correct!
Or: Although I might change my mind when I will get married, I want to focus on my job, interests, and leisure now.
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