12/3 homework
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I watched the movie \'Steve Jobs\' last Sunday.
And I read the book about Artificial Intelligence.
Those made me think about a lot of things.
I didn\'t know well about him.
But, I heard the story that people in silicon valley steadily meditate and have time without any IT devices.
Even children of Steve Jobs didn\'t know iPhone and Internet in their childhood.
It was very surprising to me.
I am a researcher in the engineering field and I am studying hard to develop new technology or new materials.
But, the top people in this field avoid high technology and enjoy reading paper books and thinking.
Nowadays, \'Humanities\' is very popular and a hot potato in Korea.
Steve jobs realized many things from the trip to India and his purpose for Apple and life was fixed at that time.
So, If I can meet him, I want to ask him what is the importance of the future and personal life and how and where can he find it.
I want to live more meaningful.
강사 첨삭
Hi [이름]! Thank you so much for accomplishing and sending your homework early. I really appreciate it! ^ ^
Wow! When I posted this homework for you, I myself had no idea who is that person I would like to personally meet. I was thinking of one of my favorite Hollywood actors. But yours is far better! ^ ^ Why not spend time with a brilliant person like Steve Jobs with so much experience and probably wonderful life lessons he could share! ^^
-Teacher Jedah
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And I read the book about Artificial Intelligence.
And I read the book about Artificial Intelligence.
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Those made me think about a lot of things.
Those made me think about a lot of things.
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I didn\'t know well about him.
I didn\'t know well about him.
>>I didn\'t know well about Steve Jobs.
But, I heard the story that people in silicon valley steadily meditate and have time without any IT devices.
But, I heard the story that people in silicon valley steadily meditate and have time without any IT devices.
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Even children of Steve Jobs didn\'t know iPhone and Internet in their childhood.
Even children of Steve Jobs didn\'t know iPhone and Internet in their childhood.
>>Even the children of Steve Jobs didn\'t know about cellphones or the internet in their childhood.
It was very surprising to me.
It was very surprising to me.
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I am a researcher in the engineering field and I am studying hard to develop new technology or new materials.
I am a researcher in the engineering field and I am studying hard to develop new technology or new materials.
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But, the top people in this field avoid high technology and enjoy reading paper books and thinking.
But, the top people in this field avoid high technology and enjoy reading paper books and thinking.
>>CORRECT
Nowadays, \'Humanities\' is very popular and a hot potato in Korea.
Nowadays, \'Humanities\' is very popular and a hot potato in Korea.
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Steve jobs realized many things from the trip to India and his purpose for Apple and life was fixed at that time.
Steve jobs realized many things from the trip to India and his purpose for Apple and life was fixed at that time.
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So, If I can meet him, I want to ask him what is the importance of the future and personal life and how and where can he find it.
So, If I can meet him, I want to ask him what is the importance of the future and personal life and how and where can he find it.
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I want to live more meaningful.
I want to live more meaningful.
>>I want to live a more meaningful life.
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