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>How does your interest interfere with your work/study/personal life?
I never think about that my interest interfere with my life. My interest is always concerned with my study and work and furthermore, personal life. I have been really into drawing pictures and taking in artwork in exhibition. So, I studied about design in university. I also studied color through certificate because it is important factor in design. I have plan to get a job in design and am preparing now. Instead, my interest give me a chance to have better life since 20 because i found my interest which help me be happy and give me positive effect for my life early. This time, i want to have exciting but more special interest like making flower arrangement or collecting interesting things or surfing, scuba-diving.
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>How does your interest interfere with your work/study/personal life?
I never think about that my interest interfere with my life.
>> I never think that my interests interfere with my life.
My interest is always concerned with my study and work and furthermore, personal life.
>> My interests are all related to my study, work, and including my personal life.
I have been really into drawing pictures and taking in artwork in exhibition. So, I studied about design in university.
>> I have been really into drawing pictures and watching different artworks in exhibitions that\'s why I studied design in university.
I also studied color through certificate because it is important factor in design.
>> I also have a certificate in color design.
I have plan to get a job in design and am preparing now.
>> correct
Instead, my interest give me a chance to have better life since 20 because i found my interest which help me be happy and give me positive effect for my life early.
>> Instead of interfering with my life, my interests give me a chance to have a better life. When I was 20, I found a hobby that have helped me become happier and given my life a positive effect.
This time, i want to have exciting but more special interest like making flower arrangement or collecting interesting things or surfing, scuba-diving.
>> This time, I want to have a more exciting and special interest, such as flower arranging, collecting interesting things, surfing, or scuba diving.
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