12/6 homework
학생이 쓴 원문
I think that the 20s is the period to experience the various environment and find my taste.
The 30s is the period to find a job that we want to work in our whole life and fix my role and location.
The 40s is also the period to work hard, but I think I should know how can I work and where is my goal.
I think the 50s is the golden period.
If I worked hard and made efforts for my job, I will achieve recognition in the field in the 50s.
And surely the financial state would be stable in this period.
I will smoothly improve my work and I hope I become a mentor of someone who wants to be like me.
And I should prepare to go down in the 60s.
This is the best course to climb the mountain as life.
I am in the 30s now.
I am really looking forward to being in the 50s.
When I was in the 20s, I a little scared to become the 30s.
But when I was in my 30s, I found a lot of things I didn\'t know in my 20s.
So, I am not afraid to grow older.
Getting older is maturing.
And I\'m looking forward to it.
강사 첨삭
Hi [이름]! Thank you for this homework. I really appreciate your effort and consistency! ^ ^
Well thought-of answer. I definitely agree with you. Growing older doesn\'t mean that life would become boring and useless, but finding meaning and purpose and sharing what you have learned to others during the process! ^ ^
-Teacher Jedah
>>I think that in our 20\'s is the period to experience different environments and to find our taste.
The 30s is the period to find a job that we want to work in our whole life and fix my role and location.
The 30s is the period to find a job that we want to work in our whole life and fix my role and location.
>>The period of finding a job that suits us and finding a home and finding our role in life will be in our 30\'s.
The 40s is also the period to work hard, but I think I should know how can I work and where is my goal.
The 40s is also the period to work hard, but I think I should know how can I work and where is my goal.
>>The 40\'s is also the period to work hard, but I think at this point, we must already know our purpose and goal.
I think the 50\'s is the golden period.
I think the 50\'s is the golden period.
>>CORRECT
If I worked hard and made efforts for my job, I will achieve recognition in the field in the 50s.
If I worked hard and made efforts for my job, I will achieve recognition in the field in the 50s.
>>If I will work hard and put effort in my job, I will achieve recognition in my field when I will be in my 50\'s.
And surely the financial state would be stable in this period.
And surely the financial state would be stable in this period.
>>CORRECT
I will smoothly improve my work and I hope I become a mentor of someone who wants to be like me.
I will smoothly improve my work and I hope I become a mentor of someone who wants to be like me.
>>CORRECT
And I should prepare to go down in the 60s.
And I should prepare to go down in the 60s.
>>And I should be preparing for my 60\'s too.
This is the best course to climb the mountain as life.
This is the best course to climb the mountain as life.
>>This is the best course to climb up the ladder of life.
I am in the 30s now.
I am in the 30s now.
>>I\'m in my 30\'s now.
I am really looking forward to being in the 50s.
I am really looking forward to being in the 50s.
>>I am really looking forward to being in my 50\'s.
When I was in the 20s, I a little scared to become the 30s.
When I was in the 20s, I a little scared to become the 30s.
>>When I was in my 20\'s, I was a little scared to be in my 30\'s.
But when I was in my 30\'s, I found a lot of things I didn\'t know in my 20\'s.
But when I was in my 30\'s, I found a lot of things I didn\'t know in my 20\'s.
>>CORRECT
So, I am not afraid to grow older.
So, I am not afraid to grow older.
>>CORRECT
Getting older is maturing.
Getting older is maturing.
>>CORRECT
And I\'m looking forward to it.
And I\'m looking forward to it.
>>CORRECT
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