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2015-09-04 · 첨삭 강사 Venus

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I first used the internet about 10 years ago. I could learn how to use the internet in my office. I like using the internet. I think using the internet is very convenient. Sometimes while I work, I need a lot of information. When I need some information, I use the internet. While I work in my office, I often use it. Also I shop online. While I shop online,I can save my time and my money. However, we must be careful when we use the internet because we can get wrong information.

강사 첨삭

Hello [이름]!   This is amazing. You wrote correct sentences. Keep it up!   Teacher Venus^^   I first used the internet about 10 years ago. >>>CORRECTI could learn how to use the internet in my office. >>>CORRECT I like using the internet. >>>CORRECT I think using the internet is very convenient. >>>CORRECT Sometimes while I work, I need a lot of information. >>>CORRECT When I need some information, I use the internet. >>>CORRECT While I work in my office, I often use it. >>>CORRECT Also I shop online. >>>CORRECT While I shop online,I can save my time and my money. >>>CORRECT However, we must be careful when we use the internet because we can get wrong information. >>>CORRECT

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