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2016-08-24 · 첨삭 강사 Lynn

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Many Korean people have the smart phone. It is very expensive but it has a lof of functions. For example it can be mp3, tv, calculator, computer and a lot. If I don't have the smart phone, I have to spend boring time. And it will be uncomfortable in my life.

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Hello Ms. [이름],

Mobile phone functions had been changing over the years. Do you remember your first mobile phone? It has only the call function. Then Motorola and Nokia came up with cellphones which are smaller and can be used for texting. And then it kept on changing until we have our recent smart phones. I wonder what the mobile phones of the future will look like. What about you? Have a great day Ms. [이름] and I hope to hear your voice very soon.

Take care!

~T. Lynn

Many Korean people have the smart phone.

>>correct!
It is very expensive but it has a lot of functions.

>>correct!
For example it can be mp3, tv, calculator, computer and a lot.
>>For example it can be mp3, TV, calculator, computer and a lot more.

If I don\'t have the smart phone, I have to spend boring time.
>>If I don\'t have a smart phone, I will be very bored.

And it will be uncomfortable in my life.

>> And my life will be uncomfortable.

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