12.Dec
학생이 쓴 원문
강사 첨삭
In my opinion, humans are too dependent on computers and cellphones as well.
It must needs to use the computers for variety situations at the present day. But it make humans do not think anymore.
For example, nowadays many people don’t memorize a contact number of acquaintance. Before you have computer and cellphone universally, we should memorize many things.
For this reason, computer makes people don’t think too much. It should help us, but too dependent life on computers is not good for humans
I believe that we need analog method sometimes.
In my opinion, humans are too dependent on computers and cellphones as well. It\'s a must to use computers for variety of situations at the present day. But it\'s making humans to be lazy and not to think deeply. For instance, nowadays, many people don\'t memorize their acquaintances contact numbers. Before we have computers and cellphones universally, we should memorize many things first. For this reason, computer makes people not to think deeply. It should help us and in fact it is a great help. But being too dependent on computers is not good for humans. I believe that we need analog method sometimes.
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