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2018-12-05 · 첨삭 강사 Jedah

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Does being content with the way things are, prevent people from improving themselves and doing better? My answer is obviously yes. It\'s not a good way to improve myself to stay in present. If we didn\'t do anything because we were content with the way we were, we may still be hunter-gatherers. For sure, we must take a rest during our travellings to improve ourselves. I mean doing something is better than doing nothing! But I think pushing some people to improve their career is not helpful for them. It may down their morale to do something. I think we should have time to think about ourselves. It could decrease time to concern about our future. And through people\'s characteristics, we need to think differently. Someone may think doing nothing is better. But in my case, I think I should do something more and more. PS. Happy Tuesday! I felt today was Friday. I don\'t know why. Maybe I\'d like to take a rest. See you tomorrow.^^

강사 첨삭

Hi [이름]! Thank you for doing your homework on time. I appreciate it! Thank you for your thoughts here too! I didn\'t quite understand some of your sentences though. ^ ^

To improve oneself, you have to explore a lot of things, experience is the best teacher too, and it\'s always nice to stay out of your comfort zone so you can be better! ^ ^

Yeah.. I wish it\'s a Friday too! ^ ^

-Teacher Jedah



My answer is obviously yes.

>>Correct

It\'s not a good way to improve myself to stay in present.

>>It\'s not a good way to improve oneself if you would just stay put.

If we didn\'t do anything because we were content with the way we were, we may still be hunter-gatherers.

>>If we didn\'t do anything in the past because we were contented with the way we were, we may still be hunter-gatherers.

For sure, we must take a rest during our travellings to improve ourselves.

>>For sure, it is a must to take a rest after travelling so we can improve ourselves.

I mean doing something is better than doing nothing!

>>Correct

But I think pushing some people to improve their career is not helpful for them.

>>Correct

It may down their morale to do something.

>>It may lessen their esteem and self morale to do something else. 

I think we should have time to think about ourselves.

>>Correct

It could decrease time to concern about our future.

>>We may waste time thinking about the future. (I hope this is what you mean)

And through people\'s characteristics, we need to think differently.

>>People have their own characteristics, so we think differently.

Someone may think doing nothing is better.

>>Correct

But in my case, I think I should do something more and more.

>>Correct

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