122. Homework

2018-05-24 · 첨삭 강사 Rose

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ESSAY: If you had the chance to have a 30-minute opportunity to be transported to another part of the globe, where would it be and why? If I have a chance to have 30 minutes opportunity to visit another part of the globe, I would like to go WAKANDA to steal a Vibranium making a suit like a black panther. It’s because first reason it looks cool. Second if I had worn the suit, I am able to go everywhere since it has a function called cloaking; I can be an invisible man. Furthermore, third, I may do anything what I want. And then I saw it could protect physical damages even a gun in the movie. However, I am wondering whether it shall protect super high and low temperature or not. So, I want to do experiment if I have a chance to visit there. Actually, I can't select the specific area because I want to travel a lot of places. Thus, I just wrote an impossible story since I already knew the questions also impossible.

강사 첨삭

Whew, Wakanda forever!

I just watched the movie last night, and I think that Wakanda is a modern Utopia :)

How I wish we could have it to heal and protect a lot of beings.

Have a great day, and see you!

ESSAY: If you had the chance to have a 30-minute opportunity to be transported to another part of the globe, where would it be and why?
>>CORRECT!
If I have a chance to have 30 minutes opportunity to visit another part of the globe, I would like to go WAKANDA to steal a Vibranium making a suit like a black panther.
>>If I have a chance to have a 30 minutes opportunity to visit another part of the globe, I would like to go to WAKANDA to steal a Vibranium making a suit like Black Panther\'s.
It’s because first reason it looks cool.

>>The first reason is that it looks cool.

 Second if I had worn the suit, I am able to go everywhere since it has a function called cloaking; I can be an invisible man.

>>Second if I wear the suit, I am able to go everywhere since it has a function called cloaking; I can be an invisible man.

Furthermore, third, I may do anything what I want.
>>Third,
I may do everything that I want.
And then I saw it could protect physical damages even a gun in the movie.

>> And then I saw it could protect a person from physical damages even from a gun in the movie.

 However, I am wondering whether it shall protect super high and low temperature or not.

>> However, I am wondering whether it can protect the wearer from super high and low temperature or not.

So, I want to do experiment if I have a chance to visit there.
>>
So, I want to do an experiment if I have a chance to visit there.
Actually, I can\'t select the specific area because I want to travel a lot of places.

>>Actually, I can\'t select a specific area because I want to travel to a lot of places.

Thus, I just wrote an impossible story since I already knew the questions also impossible.

>>Thus, I just wrote an impossible story since I already knew the question was also impossible.

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