124. Homework

2018-05-28 · 첨삭 강사 Rose

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ESSAY: If you were asked to choose one place in your city where you wouldn´t take a tourist, which one would you choose and why? Most of the times, I use to go to the same place meeting my friends for a drinking. It’s because I am a person who likes to stay at home instead of going outside when I have an enough free time. Thus, I don’t know where I give an advice to the tourist in our city since I am not familiar with my city although I have been living here for a long time. If someone asked me where they should avoid in my city, I would like to recommend them to visit the other city instead of visiting here. Because, the city that I am living at is comfort and quite city but there are nothing special for site seeing. Therefore, they might not make an unforgettable memory here.

강사 첨삭

Good morning, Jason^^

If I were asked this question, I would say that I would never, ever take a tourist to slum areas in Manila.

It is really dangerous as there are a lot criminals living there, and safety is an uncertainty.

Have a great day, see you!

ESSAY: If you were asked to choose one place in your city where you wouldn´t take a tourist, which one would you choose and why?
>>CORRECT!
Most of the times, I use to go to the same place meeting my friends for a drinking.

>>Most of the times, I use to go to the same place meeting my friends for drinks.

 It’s because I am a person who likes to stay at home instead of going outside when I have an enough free time.

>> It’s because I am a person who likes to stay at home instead of going outside when I have enough free time.

Thus, I don’t know where I give an advice to the tourist in our city since I am not familiar with my city although I have been living here for a long time.

>>Thus, I don’t know where I should advice a tourist to go since I am not familiar with my city although I have been living here for a long time.

If someone asked me where they should avoid in my city, I would like to recommend them to visit the other city instead of visiting here.

>>If someone asked me where they should avoid in my city, I would like to recommend them to visit another city instead of visiting here.
Because, the city that I am living at is comfort and quite city but there are nothing special for site seeing.

>>Because, the city that I am living in is a comfortable and quiet city, but there is nothing special for sightseeing.

Therefore, they might not make an unforgettable memory here.

>>CORRECT!

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