127. Homework8
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I think we would think that the moment is special if we spent it with a memorable person~
Thank you very much for doing your homework, Jason!
And thank you for remembering our sport, sepak takraw, ha! ha!
See you!
ESSAY: Write about an enjoyable or memorable experience with a special person. Explain what made this event so memorable.
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When I met my birthday in the high school grade 2, my friends made me an unforgettable memory.
>>When I celebrated my birthday on my second year in high school, my friends made me an unforgettable memory.
They gathered money from the classmate to buy an ice-cream cake and wristwatch to give me a birthday gift.
>>They gathered money from our classmates to buy an ice cream cake and a wristwatch to give me as birthday gifts.
They did not force our classmate and asked them only 500 won if they wanted to join it.
>> They did not force our classmates and asked them only 500 won if they wanted to join it.
Besides, other classmates were willing to give money not only 500 won but also 1,000 or 2,000 won.
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I don\'t know where the watch is now and how did we share the small cake to eat together since I am a kind of a forgetful person.
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Anyways, we still keep in touch each other’s and we are going to travel to Gang Hwa island next weekend.
>>Anyways, we still keep in touch with each other and we are going to travel to Gang Hwa Island next weekend.
We will play Jok-Gu which is same as sepaktakraw with some game and drinking alcohol, eating pork belly and something together.
>>We will play Jok-Gu which is the same as sepak takraw with some game and drinking alcohol, eating pork belly and doing something together.
I hope I make another enjoyable experience with them again.
>> I hope I could make another enjoyable experience with them again.
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