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2016-08-30 · 첨삭 강사 Lynn

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Hello. I don't like shopping like you. I hate crowded places. When I need to buy my clothes, I don't waste time because I just buy my clothes the place which is my first store. However these days my eldest daughter wants to go shopping with me. So I have to spend time with her despite I don't like it. It's okay, while I am walking, I can lose my weight. ^^

강사 첨삭

Hello Ms. [이름],

Oh, yes. Shopping could be a form of exercise because yo walk for a long time while carrying some bags or things you\'ve bought. I guess that\'s one way of thinking positively about shopping. See you tomorrow!

Take care!

~T. Lynn

Hello.

>>Hello, or Hello!
I don\'t like shopping like you.

>>correct!
I hate crowded places.

>>correct!
When I need to buy my clothes, I don\'t waste time because I just buy my clothes the place which is my first store.

>>When I need to buy my clothes, I don\'t waste time because I just buy it on the first store I go to.
However these days my eldest daughter wants to go shopping with me.

>>correct grammar! (However,)
So I have to spend time with her despite I don\'t like it.

>>So I have to spend time with her although I don\'t like it.
It\'s okay, while I am walking, I can lose my weight. ^^

>>correct!

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