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Hello Ms. [이름],
Oh, yes. Shopping could be a form of exercise because yo walk for a long time while carrying some bags or things you\'ve bought. I guess that\'s one way of thinking positively about shopping. See you tomorrow!
Take care!
~T. Lynn
Hello.
>>Hello, or Hello!
I don\'t like shopping like you.
>>correct!
I hate crowded places.
>>correct!
When I need to buy my clothes, I don\'t waste time because I just buy my clothes the place which is my first store.
>>When I need to buy my clothes, I don\'t waste time because I just buy it on the first store I go to.
However these days my eldest daughter wants to go shopping with me.
>>correct grammar! (However,)
So I have to spend time with her despite I don\'t like it.
>>So I have to spend time with her although I don\'t like it.
It\'s okay, while I am walking, I can lose my weight. ^^
>>correct!
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