131. Homework

2018-06-14 · 첨삭 강사 Rose

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ESSAY: People find it very difficult to speak in public or to give a presentation before an audience. Do you think public speaking skill is really important? Speaking skill in front of an audience is very important since it’s a type of talent that I don’t have. I think I have a kind of phobia which I can’t speak well in public even if I use mother language; I envy them who can speak frequently without any nervous feeling. Besides, in my opinion, communication skills are very important because it’s a way to express their feeling and opinion to the others. Furthermore, it works to persuade listeners to change their mind to the same view of the speaker. Anyways, if I need to make a team with 10 people, I need to spend time to persuade them joining my team by man to man since I don’t know how to say in front of a lot of people. But, what if I can present my view with 10 persons at the same time, then it might spend less time for making them a team It’s the reason why to speak in public is really important to me since I am a person who is always thinking about efficiency.

강사 첨삭

I think training ourselves to speak in front of an audience is a surefire way to build confidence.

Anyhow, I am so happy because day by day, your writing skill is getting better, and you are making less structure and grammar mistakes!

Keep it up, Jason!

Thank you very much, and have a great day~

ESSAY: People find it very difficult to speak in public or to give a presentation before an audience. Do you think public speaking skill is really important?
>>CORRECT!
Speaking skill in front of an audience is very important since it’s a type of talent that I don’t have.

>>CORRECT!

I think I have a kind of phobia which I can’t speak well in public even if I use mother language; I envy them who can speak frequently without any nervous feeling.

>>I think I have a kind of phobia in which I can’t speak well in public even if I use my mother language; I envy them who can speak frequently without any nervous feeling.

Besides, in my opinion, communication skills are very important because it’s a way to express their feeling and opinion to the others.

>> Besides, in my opinion, communication skills are very important because it’s a way to express their feeling and opinion to others.

Furthermore, it works to persuade listeners to change their mind to the same view of the speaker.
>> Furthermore, it works to persuade listeners to change their mind to the same view as the speaker\'s.
Anyways, if I need to make a team with 10 people, I need to spend time to persuade them joining my team by man to man since I don’t know how to say in front of a lot of people.

>>Anyways, if I need to make a team with 10 people, I need to spend time to persuade them joining my team individually since I don’t know how to say it in front of a lot of people.

But, what if I can present my view with 10 persons at the same time, then it might spend less time for making them a team
>>But, what if I can present my view with 10 persons at the same time, then it might spend less time for making a team.
It’s the reason why to speak in public is really important to me since I am a person who is always thinking about efficiency.

>>CORRECT!

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