13Jan2025_Homework
학생이 쓴 원문
Writing task: How is beauty defined in your culture?
answer:
Beauty is various.
It\'s appreance, fashion style,natural, strong inner.
If I were to define one of these, I think I can define it as strong inner.
People with a strong inner self often express it outwardly. Even if their skin is rough or their fashion doesn\'t follow the trends, those with a solid inner strength always exude confidence.
I think that\'s the most beautiful appearance.
강사 첨삭
Hello, Ms. [이름]! That’s a beautiful sentiment! I agree that true beauty comes from within. A strong inner beauty is reflected in one’s confidence, kindness, and ability to overcome challenges, making it enduring and timeless.
-T. Sonny
Beauty is various.>>Correct!
OR. Beauty comes in various forms.
It\'s appreance, fashion style,natural, strong inner.
It\'s appreance, fashion style,natural, strong inner.
>>It could be reflected in appearance, style, nature, and inner strength.
If I were to define one of these, I think I can define it as strong inner.
If I were to define one of these, I think I can define it as strong inner.
>>If I were to define beauty through one of these, I can define it as one\'s inner strength.
People with a strong inner self often express it outwardly.
>>People with a strong inner self often radiate this strength outwardly.
Even if their skin is rough or their fashion doesn\'t follow the trends, those with a solid inner strength always exude confidence.
>>Even if their skin is weathered or their fashion doesn\'t follow trends, those with solid inner strength always exude confidence.
I think that\'s the most beautiful appearance.
>>Even if their skin is weathered or their fashion doesn\'t follow trends, those with solid inner strength always exude confidence.
I think that\'s the most beautiful appearance.
>>To me, that\'s the definition of true beauty.
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