14th composition

This morning I talked about the some kinds of education. The main topic is which is more important of acquiaring money versus knowledge. First of all we have to think about the reason which most of people try to be educated well comparing with others. Just for making the money or getting the knowledge. I don’t know which is correct. I just think the answer is different as their life's value. The goal of education is the way of acquiring money to me. Why? I'm not a rich person. ^^ If I were a rich person, it's a acquiring knowledge thing to me.

Hello [이름]! Good Morning! Thank you for pointing out your opinion about the topic there is no right or wrong answer. Things sometimes depend on what you think is best for you. ^^ See you in class tomorrow! T.Faye   Here are some of your corrections: This morning I talked about the some kinds of education. >>We talked about education this morning.The main topic is which is more important of acquiaring money versus knowledge. >>The main topic is about the importance of acquiring money versus acquiring knowledge.First of all we have to think about the reason which most of people try to be educated well comparing with others. >>First of all we have to think about the reason why most people want to be well educated compared to others.Just for making the money or getting the knowledge. >>Is it just for making money or gaining knowledge?I don't know which is correct. >>Correct I just think the answer is different as their life's value. >>Correct!The goal of education is the way of acquiring money to me. >>Correct! >>To me, the goal of education is the way of acquiring money. Why? I'm not a rich person. ^^ >>Correct!If I were a rich person, it's a acquiring knowledge thing to me. >>If I were rich, the important thing for me would be acquiring knowledge.