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2017-02-02 · 첨삭 강사 Lynn

학생이 쓴 원문

I checked your message yesterday. You seemed interested in my country's article. I envy you because I am not interest in my country's article. fortunately, I listened to the news on the radio. In my country, many couple don't want their children or they want only one child. Because it is not easy to keep their child because of money, job, care and many things. So most husbands or wives have to decide that they have to take care of their child without their jobs. Nowadays most wives are getting a lot of money with their job more than their husbands. So many husbands give up their job for their child. I understand it but I want my husband has his job for a long time.

강사 첨삭

Hi there Ms. [이름]!

Thank you so much for replying to my question yesterday. Actually, it\'s not only in Korea. In the Philippines, there are many househusbands too.  Often, their wives are working abroad so they don\'t have a choice but to take care of their children. You did great for today. Your sentences are longer and you were able to explain your ideas clearly. You are amazing, Ms. [이름]!

Take care!

~T. Lynn

I checked your message yesterday.

>> correct!
 You seemed interested in my country\'s articles.

>> correct!
 I envy you because I am not interest in my country\'s article.

>> I envy you because I am not interested in my country\'s articles.

OR MAYBE YOU MEAN>> I envy you because I don\'t have time to read articles about my country.
 fortunately, I listened to the news on the radio.

>> Fortunately, I listen to the news on the radio.
 In my country, many couple don\'t want their children or they want only one child.

>> In my country, many couple don\'t want to have children or they want to have only one child.
 Because it is not easy to keep their child because of money, job, care and many things.

>> Because it is not easy to care for a child due to money, job, child-raring and many other things.
 So most husbands or wives have to decide that they have to take care of their child without their jobs.

>> So most husbands or wives have to decide that they have to take care of their children by quitting their jobs.
 Nowadays, most wives are getting a lot of money with their job more than their husbands.

>> Nowadays, most wives are earning more money than their husbands.
 So many husbands give up their job for their child. 

>> So many husbands give up their job for their children.  
 I understand it but I want my husband has his job for a long time.

>>  I can understand that but I want my husband to work for a long time.

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