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학생이 쓴 원문
강사 첨삭
Hi there Ms. [이름]!(\",)
I know that you have been fighting with your weight for along time. As for me, I gave up the fight along time ago. (\",)
Take care!(\",)
~T. Lynn
Health is very important in our life.
>> correct!
These days most people can live long time.
>> correct!
OR>> People have longer life span now.
So they want to keep healthily in their life.
>> So they want to be healthy all their life.
However, nowadays there are a lot of delious foods everywhere.
>> correct!
So we can\'t keep our health when we become fat.
>> So we can\'t be healthy when we become fat.
So most people start dieting but they repeat the same mistakes.
>> correct!
Eat food and go diet again, again and again.
>> correct!
So dieting industry can develop for a long time.
>> So the dieting industry can develop for a long time.
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